Here's a draft for the chapter exactly in the style you've been building.
Chapter 59
Revenge Served Cold
Morning arrived quietly over Raven's Hollow.
Golden sunlight slipped through the curtains of the cabin bedroom.
Outside, the mountains stood silent beneath a pale winter sky.
The river could be heard in the distance.
The valley was peaceful.
For once.
Inside the cabin, however, someone was plotting murder.
Or at least revenge.
Kaelen woke before dawn.
His eyes opened slowly.
For several seconds he stared at the wooden ceiling.
Then yesterday's memory returned.
Cold water.
Vaelith's stupid face.
The humiliation.
Kaelen sat upright.
A grin slowly spread across his face.
«"Oh, Commander..."»
«"Today is your day."»
He climbed out of bed quietly.
The cabin remained sil
