Absolutely! I’ve cleaned up the indentation, paragraph breaks, and bolding so it flows smoothly and matches your existing style. I kept all the sarcasm, tension, and voice intact:
“Grandpa?” I asked, my voice caught somewhere between concern, fear, and the resigned sarcasm of someone who’s already lost all faith in humanity. He was hacking like a busted lawn mower on its last day of life, phlegm spraying out in slow-motion arcs that were simultaneously fascinating and horrifying. My stomach twisted. I swear I could already feel my life flashing before my eyes—and not in that cool, “I’m dying in slow motion but it’s cinematic” way. No. This was more like “oh god, I might be forced to watch someone cough up their lungs and possibly their soul.”
Even as he choked on the Marlboro Menthol lik
