My journey on becoming a general on Another world

if you happen to find this pls tell the me the rating 1-10 I'm still a beginner and tell me the wrongs and pls advise this little beginner. Prologue-Regret and Death Even before humans learned to read and write there is already conflicts. Ever since I was born there is war,Even when I became a teenager i was drafted to the army immediately. I can't even resist nor say my opinion it was a time where you don't have freedom of speech because it is the age of war. After training for two years in the camp I was drafted for my first battlefield. It was hell I can't breathe my feet are trembling my comrades is falling one bye one. The tension in the air is so strong I feel like im gonna pass out. The sounds of guns and bombs in my surroundings the cries and shouts of enemies and comrades.Im getting a hard time breathing so this is what it feels like in a battlefield. [WALTER!! move your ass already are you planning to die here!] With the shout of my comrade I've regained my consciousness. [TAKE COVER!! enemy bombers incoming!] [........ ....] Sounds of silence [What? What was that?] Screams Confusion [Captain!! are you alright?] I ask while looking around my surroundings.It seems a lot of us had been blowned. I can hear the screams of my comrades [I'm fine!! What about you?] Captain answered so his fine I'm relieved.What about me I hope nothing happened to me [I'm fine too Sir!! WHAT!!?!] after looking around I turned over my body and it's blown to smithereens. The F*CK I've been blowned to smithereens [What happened!!?] Captain ask worriedly [My body!!.. Have been blowned to smithereens!!!] My body feels numb, I look like a crushed potato my lower half is burned by the explosion and my sight is foggy because of the impact. [HOLY SH*T!! Are you still breathing??,can you hear me?] captain worriedly ask my condition [I'm still breathing!,but I can't feel a thing!! I can't move!!] I said to captain while lying on the ground and my lower half is looking like smashed potato [HEEY!!! carry all the wounded let's retreat!!] Captain loudly ordered my comrades [Just leave me here!!,You can't save me I will just give you more burdens] I said willingly, well my body is already smithereens my time is nearing.I don't think still have the energy to be drag on to a safe place. [WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?!!, We will surpass this and live on!!] Captain said loudly [CAPTAIN!! live for me!!I don't think I still have much time left!] I said happily with a bit of tears.Well I don't regret saying it but it's a bit embarrassing.but I'm sure it will help him ease up.How unlucky am I to think I will die on my first battle, what a destiny. [Sure I will not forget you, I promise I will live for you and all of our fallen comrades!!] He said it while crying [FASTER!! MOVE YOUR ASSES!! ENEMIES ARE COMING!!] He said loudly while being in a hurry [Well farewell Aldrich Walter FLY HIGH!!!] I hope they safely reach the safe grounds. Well I think this is my end, not a bad life. I've had my fun during my journey.I have no regrets. [UAAAAAAGH!!!!, I HAVE NO REGRET MY ASS!!] I said it while regretting my end. [I should've have enjoyed my life more,I still didn't fulfill my dream] [well this is it..........] Aldrich Walter died during a war at the age of 16,his only regret is dying with out fulfilling his dream.He got reincarnated in a world of swords and magic, This is the story of Aldrich Walter on another world where he start from the bottom to the top,his journey on becoming a general in another world.